Wednesday, 23 March 2011

Birds

We cling to each other,
We’re mad dogs with
Blinkered eyes, with
One destination.
The tunnel down which
We fall – as black
As the valleys that form
Crushed velvet.

We met in our teens,
Again in our twenties.
There was no connection.
Just a bit too much to drink,
At first.
Time is the great, great
Throw-together-er.
Trust reached a level,
Stabilised,
Established itself.

And then,
We thought we understood each other.
But we both kept our heads.
So perhaps we did
Understand.
Spinning hawks
Eyeing one another,
Laughing,
Angry.

Are we different to them?
Were you happy?
Are we birds of a snapping bill?
Soft snake of spring,
Pink grass. Quickly,
I’ll fall over running,
I’ll throw up and love it.
I think you dislike me.
I am convenient.
As you are.

My reflection in you:
The luxury of ignorance
In its every
Regrettable
Form.
Love loves company.
We wasted so much time
At home,
All we wanted to do was give.

I do not love you for you,
I know.
You know.
I am the patient receptacle
Of every outpouring
That your blood made bad
Before it was let.
I never ask for you,
But I give myself to you,
And you deal me
The ecstasy of enslavement,
That my young girl heart
Has ceased to deny
Before the protracted chatter of
Educated minds.

Savage. I
Would rip you apart
In the blink of an
Eye.

We’re poised.
Like billy-o, so happy, we’re sad.
But we are in love.
One discovers soon enough
That something’s got to give,
But whilst they may wait alone,
We wait together.
We birds of a feather.

4 comments:

  1. You read this at the Kid night, didn't you? I'm impressed and intrigued by this. But (there's usually a but) I'd lose the cliche's
    1. e.g end on 'we wait together' or change it to wait for a birds feather.
    2. Blink of an eye. Rip you apart would be stronger without that add on.

    (Poetry Cliche Alert) - say less with more.

    G x

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  2. Thanks a lot for your criticism, always appreciated...intrigued? I suppose that's good news? Yeahhh something about those last two lines, I agree with that, good advice...
    really? blink of an eye is indeed a cliche, although i never thought of it like that for some reason. so fair enough. yeah i know i have a 'poetry cliche alarm', I just don't pay attention to it often enough.

    say less with more? do you mean say more with less? or is this another example of my lack of literary experience? x

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  3. Intrigue is good. Intrigue leads me back to pieces, it sits in my head and sneaks up on me. It means the piece can be read over and over not once and abandoned.

    The Poetry Cliche Alert was a poke at myself - say more with less. I used a cliche to take the piss out myself - how I fucked that up, I'm not sure.

    Lack of literary experience?

    Working in a bookshop?
    x

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  4. compliment then. yeah i got the self-deprecating humour. say more with less, however cliched it gets it never get less true...
    general experience. never worked in a bookshop. will try soon though, its an appropriate student job haha x

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